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Wednesday, 23 May 2018

Painting a picture in the reader's head

WALT use our senses in our writing to paint a picture in the reader's head.

Here is an example of my writing. Can you imagine the scene in your head?


A long long time ago, about 100 years ago, I was a in a boat. I saw some pirates and then they saw me. I was getting attacked by pirates but I was fighting back. I was throwing bombs at their ship. It was blowing up their ship. I threw my last bomb. It was the skull one and it blew up and it killed all of the pirates and the captain died too.

I jumped into my swimsuit and then I jumped in the water to see all of the broken bits of the ship. I saw some fish, they were silver. I tasted something weird, it was chlorine. But it wasn’t normal chlorine it was slimy chlorine. I looked at the ship it had holes and it had brown rusty poles on the ship. I smelt the wood it was rotten. The wood killed the fish because it was to stinky and smelly. I went back up to my boat. I went back down. When I went back down I saw a shark then it ate me then I died. It wasn’t just me who died. So did the shark because I was stinky and because I had rotten wood on me.

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